"Dusk"
The dusk flew in on the wings of evening
From whom do you bring me a greeting?
Will you kiss my lips for him?
How I long for the place where I was born!
Perhaps only you, tranquil dusk,
know of the tears shed in your lap
from eyes that long to see
the shade of palms and olive trees
in the land of Israel.
Perhaps only you will understand
this daughter of Zion,
who weeps for her small city on the Elbe
but is afraid ever to return to it.
Comments: jesus, citlalli, emily
I was really interested by your poem and the mood it gives off, a sense of longing. You can really see this in the last stanza. I definitely agree with your connection to the foam you used as your base of the butterfly being fragile, like a butterfly and also like other people's lives. I also thought it was really cool how you showed the comparison of Terezin during the day and Terezin at night on the sides of your butterfly. Not only that, but the different flowers you used on each side of your butterfly, the black and blue ones. Like you said, the black ones represented fear which was what life was like for those at Terezin. However, the blue ones represented "that there is beauty wherever you go, and that there is life everywhere." I think that really relates to Terezin because of the poems and different works of art made there, including this one, showing that there is life everywhere.
ReplyDeleteOh yeah and great job! Your butterfly is really pretty.
DeleteReally great butterfly. I like how you had flowers on the "bad" side of the butterfly, and I think it was cool how you said that there are still beautiful things living there but with harsh conditions. It was very creative to separate the two sides with water and how you made the word happy stand out more to show there are still happy things in life. I like how you added the butterfly to represent freedom and the flowers to represent most of the things that make a person human. The sun was also a great touch to help the tone of hope along with the rainbow. Excellent job and very creative!
ReplyDeleteI really liked the thought you put into the colors of the flowers, and the brightness of the colors you chose on the more positive side of the butterfly. The fatc that you used a fragile material for it was clever as well since you compared it to the fragility of an actual butterfly and to someones' life. The contrast between the two sides really represents where the writer is and where she wishes she could be; this was a ery good thing for you to do because it helps a person understand what the poem symbolized even if they haven't read it.
ReplyDeleteI like how you separated each side to show the mood developed in your poem. The black symbolizing dreadful life is really creative. I can tell all the colors you incorporated within your butterfly was well thought of. You also mentioned the material you used for your butterfly, foam. Butterflies are fragile and so are human lives. That was clever of you to use foam. You also added a butterfly within your butterfly so show freedom. Amelia, everything was well thought of and you did an amazing job!
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